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This is final draft.
According to the critique in class, you can think about which part (technical analysis) need to add, which part ( repeating too much times) need to cut. The technical analysis part (By using___ technical thing, the author showing that____.) is really important. And the main idea of the essay should not just based on article, it should be a thoughtful idea and easy to find in your essay.
You can review the article to find some new idea.
Also professor gave us a interview material(111.pdf) as reference, so you can find some inspiration from that as well.
The final draft is due on Friday.
feel free to discuss with me if you have any idea or questions.ðŸ˜Š